Eassay - what’s the most important to me when I travel

2019-12-09 · 첨삭 강사 Tricia

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I used to enjoy stimulating new experience and activity. But as a father, comfort and safety are more important to me with few reasons. Firstly, my kids are 3 years old so they need hyper care on new places. And they still need a nap afternoon. If we have a tight travel itinerary, kids will not enjoy. Second, I prefer to recharge from very different time and place from where I live in. Especially, company life has been very busy. There are so many projects, meetings, communications and debates. I stress out about an interaction with people.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]! :)

Thank you so much for answering your homework.
Have a wonderful day. :)

- Tricia

I used to enjoy stimulating new experience and activity.
>> I used to enjoy stimulating new experiences and activities.

But as a father, comfort and safety are more important to me with few reasons.
>> But as a father, the comfort and safety are more important to me now with few reasons.

Firstly, my kids are 3 years old so they need hyper care on new places.
>> Firstly, my kids are just 3 years old so they need extra care on new places and activities.

And they still need a nap afternoon. If we have a tight travel itinerary, kids will not enjoy.
>> And they still need an afternoon nap. If we have a tight travel itinerary, the kids will not enjoy.

Second, I prefer to recharge from very different time and place from where I live in.
>> Second, I prefer to recharge in different places and time than where I live in.

Especially, company life has been very busy.
>> Especially, my working life has been very busy.

There are so many projects, meetings, communications and debates.

>> CORRECT!

I stress out about an interaction with people.

>> I always stress out on interacting with people.

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