eating
학생이 쓴 원문
I think that we have to teach children eating habits at home and at school.
Because good eating habits are very important for children\'s growth.
It\'s not just for physical growth, it\'s build a good personality.
Eating does not just mean eating some food.
It includes how to choose food, learning manner when eating food and making relationships with others .
Unfortunately recently parents thend to raise children too much spoiled.
강사 첨삭
Hello there Ms. [이름], I agree with what you had wrote on your homework Kids these days just eat what they want and the role of the parents in their eating habits is important.
Aki~
Because good eating habits are very important for children\'s growth.
>>> CORRECT!
OR >>> Since good eating habits have a major role in children\'s growth.
It\'s not just for physical growth, it\'s build a good personality.
>>> It\'s not just for physical growth, it\'s building a good personality.
Eating does not just mean eating some food.
>>> CORRECT!
OR >>> Eating does not only mean taking in some food.
It includes how to choose food, learning manner when eating food and making relationships with others .
>>> It includes how to choose food, learning manners when eating food, and making relationships with others.
>>> It includes choosing the correct kind of food, table etiquettes and building relationship with others.
Unfortunately recently parents thend to raise children too much spoiled.
>>> Unfortunately, parents tend to raise spoiled children.
>>> Recently, parents tend to raise their children in a spoiled way.
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