Eating out

On Saturday, my family went to eating out. We ate sices of raw fish. I haven't eaten slices of raw fish for a year. So Jeffery and I ate it greedly.(ha ha^^) First, I ate delicious slices of raw fish. Next, I ate pepery.That's tastes great too!!! Saturday is happy day~

My Dear [이름]  [이름],

I was reading your composition and it made me feel hungry. ^^ ha ha  ~~   I’m glad that you had a great Saturday with your family. It’s nice to have time for the family. =)

Have a merry Monday!

God bless,

T. Venus

Here are your corrections:

On Saturday, my family went to eating out.

>> Last Saturday, my family ate out..
We ate sices of raw fish.

>> We ate slices of raw fish.
I haven't eaten slices of raw fish for a year.

>> CORRECT
So Jeffery and I ate it greedly.(ha ha^^)

>>So Jeffrey and I ate it greedily…^^
First, I ate delicious slices of raw fish.

>> CORRECT
Next, I ate pepery.That's tastes great too!!!

>> Next, I ate pepperoo. That tastes great too!!
Saturday is happy day~

>> Saturday was a happy day…