Eaton College

Dear [Name]. [이름],

A enlightening Thursday to you! ^.^

I hope all schools in the world will have Eton Colleges\' vision and mission.

They teach their students to be human beings not to be robots.

They instill to their students\' minds the importance of personality over achievements.

I want to study again.

If I have a chance to learn other things, I will go to Eton Colleges.

It would be a great thing that I would cherish all my life. ^^

That\'s all! ^^,

Thank you for the sharing! ^^.

See you tomorrow! ^.^

... Teacher Paula ... ^.~

There is Eton College which is the most famous and prestigious in England.

>> There is Eton College which is the most famous and prestigious institute in England. (There should be a noun after PRESTIGIOUS.)

>> OR: Eton College is the most famous and prestigious institute in England.

This school was founded 600 years ago and produced a total of 19 Prime Ministers.

>> CORRECT!

This school dosen\'t want an elite who is selfish, and the most important subject is physical education.

>> This school doesn\'t want an elite who is selfish, and the most important subject is Physical Education. (DOSEN\'T should be DOESN\'T. P and E in PHYSICAL EDUCATION should be capitalized, because PE is one of the subjects that is taught at school.)

They have to play a soccer together everyday and even twice in holidays, and if not, they have to pay a fine as a penalty.

>> IT IS BETTER TO WRITE: They have to play soccer together every day and even twice in holidays. If not, they have to pay a fine as a penalty. 

They put a stress on the spirit of together through physical education.

>> I THINK WHAT YOU WANT TO SAY IS: They put stress on their spirit together through Physical Education.

>> OR: They out stress on their spirit together through Physical Education.

They also do a wrestling in muddy ground in winter to raise a spirit of fair play.

>> They also do wrestling in a muddy ground in winter to raise a spirit of fair play. (Be careful on how you use ARTICLES.)

The president of the school said at graduation ceremony \" Our school don\'t want a student who want to be success in life or be famous in society, but want a persion who help others and go first to save the country in diffult situation.\"

>> The President of the school said at the graduation ceremony, \"Our school doesn\'t want a student who wants to be successful in life or be famous in the society, but want a person who helps others and goes first to save the country in difficult situation.\" (Put THE before GRADUATION CEREMONY. Put a comma after CEREMONY. WHO WANT should be WHO WANTS. SUCCESS should be SUCCESSFUL. IN SOCIETY should be IN THE SOCIETY. HELP should be HELPS. GO should be GOES. DIFFULT should be DIFFICULT.)

>> OR: The School President said at the graduation ceremony, \"Our school doesn\'t want a student who wants to be successful in life or be famous in the society, but want a person who helps others and goes first to save the country in difficult situation.\"

The student have a unique mind that he is the one who will lead the country in the future.

>> CORRECT!

In fact, 2000 of the student died at the World War I and II, and 70% of the total student died in some battle.

>> In fact, 2000 of the students died during Wold War I and II, and 70% of the total students died in some battles. (AT THE should be DURING. TOTAL STUDENT should be TOTAL STUDENTS. SOME BATTLE should be SOME BATTLES.

Continued next time

>> I will continue this story next time.