ecology essay

2016-05-06 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

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I strongly believe that we are exploiting the limited resources of the earth to the point that we can't recover them anymore. For example, billions of trees are being cut down every day to make spaces for buildings to accommodate people flowing into metropolitan. Also, a number of various kinds of animals are being killed ruthlessly so as to, for example, make leather bags or clothes for humans. In this way, people are exploiting the earth just for themselves. Another example is polluting gases created by human activities causing the global warming. Most of people are using electricity, gasses, and basically everything, without being concerned about our environmental issues. Therefore, I believe that we are still in danger of damaging the earth beyond repair.

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Hi, Lois! ^^ Wow! I\'m impressed with your composition. Your sentences and examples were really good. Good job! ^^ I honestly think that despite our awareness regarding environmental conservation, we still have the tendency to damage our environment little by little. Yes, there are civic groups who try to raise public awareness on the dangers that global warming could possibly bring due to pollution but there aren\'t any laws in most countries that would strongly support this cause.  It is through the environment that humankind thrives. There is more socioeconomic growth in a country with more natural resources because the environment provides a great source of income as in the case of mining industry, charcoal and energy production, agriculture and fisheries. Power plants and factories provide good job opportunities to the people but they also produce substantial amounts of industrial wastes that damage the environment and potentially kill everything in it including us. The sad reality is that, as civilization grows, the more that mother nature suffers. Thank you for finding the time to answer your assignment Lois. Keep it up! I\'m excited to talk to you again. See you on Monday!Take care always. ~Teacher Charry (^^,) I strongly believe that we are exploiting the limited resources of the earth to the point that we can\'t recover them anymore. >> CORRECT! OR >> In my opinion, we have greatly exploited the limited resources of the earth to the point that we can\'t recover them anymore. For example, billions of trees are being cut down every day to make spaces for buildings to accommodate people flowing into metropolitan. >> For example, billions of trees are being cut down every day to make spaces for buildings to accommodate people flowing into metropolitan area. OR >> For example, billions of trees are being cut down every day to make spaces for buildings just to accommodate the people swarming into the metropolis.   Also, a number of various kinds of animals are being killed ruthlessly so as to, for example, make leather bags or clothes for humans. >> CORRECT! OR >> In addition to that, a great number of various kinds of animals are slaughtered ruthlessly so as to, for example, make leather bags or clothes for humans. In this way, people are exploiting the earth just for themselves. >> CORRECT! OR >> By doing this, people exploit the earth\'s natural resources just for themselves. Another example is polluting gases created by human activities causing the global warming. >> Another example is the polluting gases created by human activities causing global warming. OR >> Another example would be the polluting gases created by human activities resulting to global warming. Most of people are using electricity, gasses, and basically everything, without being concerned about our environmental issues. >> Most people use electricity, fuels, and other sources of energy, without being concerned about our environmental issues. Therefore, I believe that we are still in danger of damaging the earth beyond repair. >> CORRECT! OR >> In conclusion, we are still in danger of damaging the earth beyond repair.

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