Economics 2

2011-09-19 · 첨삭 강사 camille

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In someone's school days, there's no doubt that studying is more important than earing money. Most important reason of studying is getting a job. It means they will soon make money. So they need to concentrate on studying rather than making money in school. Who knows? If they study more , they will get a well paid job. But goverment need to make some policies on student loan giving student an adventage. For instance , lowering the interest or extend the repayment period for student so that they can study.

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Thank you once again for dropping in your composition my dear..:) Job well done on your composition.. Talk to you again later my dear..T. Cam   In someone's school days, there's no doubt that studying is more important than earing money. >>For some, there's no doubt that studying is more important than earning money.Most important reason of studying is getting a job. >>The most important reason of studying is getting a high paid job.It means they will soon make money. >>correct!So they need to concentrate on studying rather than making money in school. >>correct!Who knows? >>correct!If they study more , they will get a well paid job. >>correct!But goverment need to make some policies on student loan giving student an adventage. >>But the government needs to make some policies on student loan giving students an advantage.For instance , lowering the interest or extend the repayment period for student so that they can study. >>For istance, lowering the interest or extending the payment period for students will be a big help.

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