Economics 2
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In someone's school days, there's no doubt that studying is more important than earing money.
Most important reason of studying is getting a job.
It means they will soon make money.
So they need to concentrate on studying rather than making money in school.
Who knows?
If they study more , they will get a well paid job.
But goverment need to make some policies on student loan giving student an adventage.
For instance , lowering the interest or extend the repayment period for student so that they can study.
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In someone's school days, there's no doubt that studying is more important than earing money.
>>For some, there's no doubt that studying is more important than earning money.Most important reason of studying is getting a job.
>>The most important reason of studying is getting a high paid job.It means they will soon make money.
>>correct!So they need to concentrate on studying rather than making money in school.
>>correct!Who knows?
>>correct!If they study more , they will get a well paid job.
>>correct!But goverment need to make some policies on student loan giving student an adventage.
>>But the government needs to make some policies on student loan giving students an advantage.For instance , lowering the interest or extend the repayment period for student so that they can study.
>>For istance, lowering the interest or extending the payment period for students will be a big help.
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