Education
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강사 첨삭
Hi there Sir,
We both know that education is extremely important to anybody. But I observed that young people (in my country anyway) do not see the value of education. They often take this for granted. Maybe because it is a lot easier to get educated now compared to say 20 or 30 years ago. They sometimes don\'t believe what people have to go through in order to graduate even high school during their grandparents time. Have a gear day sir! I\'ll talk to you tomorrow!
Take care!
~T. Lynn
Why do you learn a knowledge?
>> Why do we need to have knowledge?
Why do people get a education?
>> Why do people get an education?
Education can be change many things.
>> Education can change many things.
Education is not only to satisfy the intellectual curiosity but also a stepping stone for ststus upgrading.
>> correct! (spelling: status)
Education is the driving force of rapid economic growth in South Korea during the last 50 years.
>> correct!
U.S President Obama had been commented several times South Korea\'s education system and the parents that are extremely education oriented.
>> U.S. President Obama had commented several times about South Korea\'s educational system and the parents who are extremely education oriented.
Thus the underdevelopment country should have interest in education.
>> Thus the underdeveloped countries should have interest in education.
I agee with entirely Nelson Mandela\'s saying that education is the most power weapon which you can use to change the world.
>> I agree entirely with Nelson Mandela when he said that education is the most powerful weapon which you can use to change the world.
In other words, education changes themselves and is the power to change the world.
>> In other words, education can change people and it is also the power to change the world.
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