Education:Necessary,but not Everything

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I understand that English could be really difficult.

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T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:

Before arguing about the topic \'does education guarantee people a good job\', I would like to make sure that I would talk about \'wanted job\' since it is hard to define \'good job\'.

>> Before arguing the topic, \"Does education guarantee people a good job?\", I would like to make sure that I would talk about \"wanted jobs\", since it is hard to define a \"good job\".

Imagine yourself as appraiser. What would you like to see from applicants? 

>> Imagine yourself as an appraiser, what would you like to see from applicants? 

Probably you would try to find if the applicant can be good co-worker with you based on their experience and career.

>> You would probably try to find if the applicant can be a good co-worker based on their experience and career.
Knowledge ,which is from education, is not a career nor experience. 

>> Knowledge that is from education is not a career nor an experience. 

It could help people to do complicated things, but it doesn\'t mean you can get a job right away.

>> It could help people do complicated things, but it doesn\'t mean you can get a job right away.
In conclusion, education is needed to have a job you want, but it doesn\'t guarantee your job.

>> In conclusion, education is needed to have a job that you want, but it doesn\'t guarantee you a job.