Education should be accessible to people of all economic backgrounds. All levels of education, from

2017-09-19 · 첨삭 강사 Chloe

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Compulsory education that includes elementary school and middle school was erected by korea government. Also, there are 35 the public college for technical vocational education and training and a lot of national universities across the different cities under the responsibility of government. Government funding keeps the student fee so that they can learn the various field training and high quality academics through the lowest tuition. As I mentioned, government offers many different education forms to reasonable tuition or free. Therefore, I don’t agree that all levels of education should be free for those in their schooling ages except underprivileged because there are so many educational benefits to use for students who admire to study hard. We have to consider regarding being a free because these systems are consisted of citizen’s tax.

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]!

The opinion that every citizen should have the right to study at school or university for free is very controversial one.

Those, who disagree, refer to enormous expenditures of government in case of establishing such laws.

Although, I hold the viewpoint that not charging people for education could become very beneficial for country and its economy.

Enjoy the rest of your day!

~Teacher Chloe

Compulsory education that includes elementary school and middle school was erected by korea government.
>>Compulsory education in elementary and middle school was erected by the Korean government. 
Also, there are 35 the public college for technical vocational education and training and a lot of national universities across the different cities under the responsibility of government.
>>There are 35 the public colleges for technical vocational education and training and a lot of national universities across the different cities are under the government\'s care. 
Government funding keeps the student fee so that they can learn the various field training and high quality academics through the lowest tuition.
>>Government funding keeps the students\' lowest tuition fee so that they can acquire various field trainings and high quality education. 
As I mentioned, government offers many different education forms to reasonable tuition or free.
>>As I mentioned, the government offers many different education forms to reasonable tuitions or for free.
Therefore, I don’t agree that all levels of education should be free for those in their schooling ages except underprivileged because there are so many educational benefits to use for students who admire to study hard.
>>Therefore, I don’t agree that all levels of education should be free except for underprivileged because there are so many educational benefits to for students who admire to study hard.
We have to consider regarding being a free because these systems are consisted of citizen’s tax. 

>>We have to be considerate citizen\'s taxes.

 

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