Education should be free for equality
학생이 쓴 원문
Equality is important even in a capitalist society. In case of Korean constitution, nations have rights to get equal education. I also think that guaranteeing free education is one of the most important policies.
Education should be free because of capitalism. Equality is almost impossible in a capitalist society without intervention of the government. The rich can invest their money to their children for education. It is not difficult for them. However, the poor can\'t do it. They have to invest their money only to their living. If the educational gap between the rich and the poor become bigger, inheritance of the social class accelerates.
Education is essential when we think of the social class. I think education is a social ladder. If policies don\'t guarantee free education, a social ladder must be broken. It means that the rich become richer and the poor become poorer. Therefore, education should be free for reducing the gap between the high and the low class.
강사 첨삭
WOW! I love your points on here, [이름].
I definitely agree.
~Teacher Eve.
Equality is important even in a capitalist society.
>> Correct!
In case of Korean constitution, nations have rights to get equal education.
>> In the case of our Korean constitution, nations have rights to equal education.
I also think that guaranteeing free education is one of the most important policies.
>> Correct!
>> OR: I also think that implementing free education is one of the most important policies.
Education should be free because of capitalism.
>> Correct!
Equality is almost impossible in a capitalist society without intervention of the government.
>> Equality is almost impossible in a capitalist society without the intervention of the government.
The rich can invest their money to their children for education.
>> Correct!
It is not difficult for them. However, the poor can\'t do it.
>> It is not difficult for them, however, the poor can\'t do it.
They have to invest their money only to their living.
>> They have to invest their money to live.
If the educational gap between the rich and the poor become bigger, inheritance of the social class accelerates.
>> If the educational gap between the rich and the poor becomes bigger, inheritance of the social class accelerates.
Education is essential when we think of the social class.
>> Correct!
I think education is a social ladder.
>> Correct!
If policies don\'t guarantee free education, a social ladder must be broken.
>> If the policies don\'t guarantee free education, the social ladder must be broken.
It means that the rich become richer and the poor become poorer.
>> It means that the rich will become richer and the poor will become poorer.
Therefore, education should be free for reducing the gap between the high and the low class.
>> Therefore, education should be free to reduce the gap between the high and the low class.
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