Elaborate “Educating the mind without educating the heart is no education at all.” -Aristotle
학생이 쓴 원문
We educated to everything when we born.
talk, walk, eat and others. Our first is literally useless existence
But education make us useful.
Nowadays, software can learn too.
So what is different from machine between human?
Human can read context and situation.
That is only human can do.
Because we have warm heart and mind for respect someone.
So we can express polite to someone
Even if machine learning this behavior, this is action that trained.
They just pretend to respect to someone. actually that inside is empty.
But recently society getting complex and people becoming like machine.
Even though some people learned good education, they can\'t feel anythings.
They becoming well-educated creepy machine.
So they can\'t feel sympathy and empathy to who neighbor we live with
This is the worst way that to break our connection in our society
Therefore, in order to be linked, we need educate with warm heart.
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HAPPY WEDNESDAY!
Interesting points again, [이름] [이름] and very expressive.
Education without a heart is definitely not a good education at all.
I was thinking, are there any volunteer work implemented in your schools?
Great composition! Keep it up.
~Teacher Eve.
We educated to everything when we born.
>> We get educated about everything when we were born.
talk, walk, eat and others. Our first is literally useless existence
>> Talk, walk, eat and others. Our first experience is literally useless.
But education make us useful.
>> But with education, it makes us useful.
Nowadays, software can learn too.
>> Nowadays, a software can learn too.
So what is different from machine between human?
>> So what is the difference between a machine and a human?
Human can read context and situation.
>> Humans can read contexts and situations.
That is only human can do.
>> That is the only thing humans can do.
Because we have warm heart and mind for respect someone.
>> Because we have a warm heart and mind for someone else\'s respect.
So we can express polite to someone
>> So we can be polite to someone.
Even if machine learning this behavior, this is action that trained.
>> Even is a machine learns this behavior, this action is trained.
They just pretend to respect to someone. actually that inside is empty.
>> They just pretend to respect someone, but they\'re actually empty inside.
But recently society getting complex and people becoming like machine.
>> But recently, the society is getting more complex and people are becoming similar to machines.
Even though some people learned good education, they can\'t feel anythings.
>> Even though some people have good education, they can\'t feel anything.
They becoming well-educated creepy machine.
>> They\'re becoming well-educated but creepy machines.
So they can\'t feel sympathy and empathy to who neighbor we live with
>> So they are unable to feel sympathy and empathy to their neighbors.
This is the worst way that to break our connection in our society
>> This is the worst way to break our connection to our society.
Therefore, in order to be linked, we need educate with warm heart.
>> Therefore, in order to be linked again, we need to be educated with a warm heart.
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