Elderly people
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Thesedays, the birth rate is decreasing and it makes an aging society. It means our government should provied several schemes or politics to support elderly people. I know there are already many politics for elderly people such as low floor bus. This bus was released about 10 years ago, and its intention was to help someone who has problem in walking like elderly people and disabled. However, I don\'t have much interest in like these schemes, so it\'s all I know. As I think about several politics which is helpful to elderly people, the medical expenses should be supported. In Korea, the rich-poor gap is drastically big and there are many people who couldn\'t go to hospital at right time because of medical expenses. Thus, I think the goverment should consider how checking the wealth for each person and make a right criterion for support.
강사 첨삭
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~T. Lynn
Thesedays, the birth rate is decreasing and it makes an aging society.
>>These days, the birth rate is decreasing and it makes an aging society.
It means our government should provied several schemes or politics to support elderly people.
>>It means our government should provide several schemes or politics to support elderly people.
I know there are already many politics for elderly people such as low floor bus.
>>correct
This bus was released about 10 years ago, and its intention was to help someone who has problem in walking like elderly people and disabled.
>>This bus was released about 10 years ago, and its intention was to help someone who has a problem in walking like elderly people and disabled.
However, I don\'t have much interest in like these schemes, so it\'s all I know.
>>However, I don\'t have much interest in these kinds of schemes, so it\'s all I know.
As I think about several politics which is helpful to elderly people, the medical expenses should be supported.
>>correct
In Korea, the rich-poor gap is drastically big and there are many people who couldn\'t go to hospital at right time because of medical expenses.
>>In Korea, the rich-poor gap is drastically big and there are many people who couldn\'t go to the hospital at right time because of medical expenses.
Thus, I think the goverment should consider how checking the wealth for each person and make a right criterion for support.
>>Thus, the government should consider how wealthy each person is and make the right criterion for the support.
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