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There are two emails that I need to write in English. Could you check them? 01 Hi Catherin We recieved money successfully. Thank you. I hope you to introduce other exhibitions and art fairs if they are held. It could be another chance to introduce our artists. And also I ask you a favor to take care Rawside artists' remaining works. 02 Hi Diane I am a member of Rawside, Ha Myoung-su. I am emailing you to appreciate opening of exhibition 'Margins to Mainstream : Contemporary Artists with Disabilities' where one of our artist participated in. Thank you for all efforts to held this exhibition. And may I ask you a favor? Because we cannot attend the exhibition I hope you to send us photos containing Kwak Kyu Seob's section. 03 What are the best ways to make a good first impression? I think that most people like a good listener who is concerned about what people are saying. Thus, if you want express yourself positively, listen amd answer carefully. It will be impressive to other people

Hello there [이름]! Thanks for dropping by at the composition board. Anyway, just go over my corrections please. Have a great day!

~t. KELLY~

There are two emails that I need to write in English. Could you check them?

>> Correct.

01

Hi Catherin

>> Correct.

We recieved money successfully.

>>  We received the money successfully.

Thank you.

>> Correct.

I hope you to introduce other exhibitions and art fairs if they are held.

>>  I hope you\'ll introduce other exhibitions and art fairs if there are new schedules.

It could be another chance to introduce our artists.

>> Correct.

And also I ask you a favor to take care Rawside artists\' remaining works.

>>  And also, can I ask you a favor of taking care of Rawside\'s  artists remaining works.
02
Hi Diane

>> Correct.

I am a member of Rawside, Ha Myoung-su.

>> Correct.

I am emailing you to appreciate opening of exhibition \'Margins to Mainstream : Contemporary Artists with Disabilities\' where one of our artist participated in.

>> I am sending an e-mail to manifest my appreciation of the opening exhibition for  \'Margins to Mainstream : Contemporary Artists with Disabilities\' where one of our artists participated.

Thank you for all efforts to held this exhibition. 

>>  Thank you for all the efforts you\'ve exerted to make this exhibition possible. 

And may I ask you a favor?

>> Correct.

Because we cannot attend the exhibition I hope you to send us photos containing Kwak Kyu Seob\'s section. 

>> Because we cannot attend the exhibition I hope you to send us photos of Kwak Kyu Seob\'s section. 

03 What are the best ways to make a good first impression?

 I think that most people like a good listener who is concerned about what people are saying.

>> Correct.

Thus, if you want express yourself positively, listen amd answer carefully.

>>  Thus, if you want to express yourself positively, listen and answer carefully.

It will be impressive to other people

>> Correct.