emergency
학생이 쓴 원문
We could be encounter several disaters at any time in our lives like fire, earthquake, flood and heavy snow etc.
So we should train how to act in emergency situations.
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There is emergency bell in each classroom in my school.
When the bell rings, the students stop everything and go out the the playground quackly and quietly.
강사 첨삭
Great day, Ms. [이름]!
One of the things we need to teach to our children and students is he proper way of responding emergency situation. I am glad to hear that from you.
Thank you for writing your composition.
Talk with you later :)
Aki~
Aki~
We could be encounter several disaters at any time in our lives like fire, earthquake, flood and heavy snow etc.
>>> We could encounter several disasters any time like fire, earthquakes, flood, heavy snow, etc.
So we should train how to act in emergency situations.
>>> So we should be trained on how to act in emergency situations
There is emergency bell in each classroom in my school.
>>> CORRECT!
When the bell rings, the students stop everything and go out the the playground quickly and quietly.
>>> CORRECT!
OR >>> Upon the ringing of the bell, everyone should stop what they are doing and proceed to the playground quickly and quietly.
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