Emigration?

2016-08-29 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

학생이 쓴 원문

My friends emigrated from Korea to America 20 years ago. The friends was a newspaper writer and his wife was public corporation employees. They didn't seem to any problem. But oneday they suddenly departed. I heard from others that he changed jobs many times form car dearler to salesman, and so on. His wife worked as a seamstress. I wondered if he was happy. It is not easy to live in a other country. Because it's a different culture, different race(people), different language, different environment. Immigrant have to acquire newly everything in their country. And he should be abondon everything that he had before. In global era, it is necessary to travel and to visit to know temporarilly other country. But it it not necessary to immigrant to other country. The country which I would like to stay temporarilly is a Australia and Greek. Because Australia has an excellent natural and not many people. Greek has a lot of myths and Gods.

강사 첨삭

Hello Sir,

You know this expression right sir,\'There\'s no place like home\'. I lived in Bangkok for three years and I could say that although there are things which are better there like cheaper cost of living, I would still recommend staying and working in my own country to anybody better than staying there. You are right, traveling abroad is okay but our home country is still the best. Talk to you on Wednesday! Have a nice day!

Take care!

~T. Lynn

My friends migrated from Korea to America 20 years ago.

>>correct!

The friends was a newspaper writer and his wife was public corporation employees.

>>My friend was a newspaper writer and his wife was working for a public company/corporation.

They didn\'t seem to any problem.

>>They didn\'t seem to have any problem.

But one day, they suddenly departed.

>>correct grammar!

BUT >>What do you mean sir? Departed like died?

I heard from others that he changed jobs many times form car dealer to salesman, and so on.

>>correct!

His wife worked as a seamstress.

>>correct!

I wondered if he was happy.

>>correct!

It is not easy to live in a other country.

>>It is not easy to live in another country.

Because it\'s a different culture, different race(people), different language, different environment.

>>correct!

Immigrant have to acquire newly everything in their country.

>>Immigrants have to acquire everything new in that country.

And he should be abondon everything that he had before.

>>And he should abandon everything that he had before.

In global era, it is necessary to travel and to visit to know temporarilly other country.

>>In global era, it is necessary to travel and to visit and know other countries temporarily.

But it it not necessary to immigrant to other country.

>>But it is not necessary to migrate to other countries.

The country which I would like to stay temporarilly is a Australia and Greek.

>>The country which I would like to stay temporarily is either Australia or Greece.

Because Australia has an excellent natural and not many people.

>>I\'d like to stay in Australia because of its excellent natural resources and there are few people.

Greek has a lot of myths and Gods.

>>Greece has a lot myths and gods.

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