energy things
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According to increase demand about energy-resources, Our environment is also destroying quickly whenever we experienced before. We have some duties to next generation for their life. If we spend all of our energy in earth, they will spend hard time for their reliable life. In other hand, as developing science technology, we can make or find sufficient energy in undiscovered areas. As a result, if we spend all of our energy or not, we should make or find(or both) other resources. Already late for saving and protecting to our environment a little bit. Because of that, we have to find new resources whatever some people want or not. If we don\'t find in our planet. We ought to go more big environment.
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Hi Jay! Thanks for the effort you have devoted in accomplishing your homework. I appreciate it. ^ ^
I agree with you. It is obvious that we are using up almost all of our resources and who knows what would be left to our future generations. I just hope that we can find a viable solution for this and not jeopardize our planet\'s situation. ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
According to increase demand about energy-resources, Our environment is also destroying quickly whenever we experienced before.
>>Because of the increase in the demand of energy resources, our environment is quickly deteriorating more than before.
We have some duties to next generation for their life.
>>We have the responsibility for the lives of the generations to come.
If we spend all of our energy in earth, they will spend hard time for their reliable life.
>>If we waste a lot of energy on earth, they will have a hard time in the future.
In other hand, as developing science technology, we can make or find sufficient energy in undiscovered areas.
>>On the other hand, as we develop more on science and technology, we can make or find sufficient energy in undiscovered areas.
As a result, if we spend all of our energy or not, we should make or find(or both) other resources.
>>CORRECT
Already late for saving and protecting to our environment a little bit.
>>I think it\'s quite late for saving and protecting our environment.
Because of that, we have to find new resources whatever some people want or not.
>>Because of that, we have to find new resources whether some people may agree with it or not.
If we don\'t find in our planet. We ought to go more big environment.
>>If we don\'t find it in our planet then we ought to explore other areas of the solar system, so to speak.
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