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I think that it is not a good idea to borrow money from a friend
There are several reasons to support my opinion
First of all, To borrow money from a friend can make their relationship shaky.
If a debtor can’t repay within the period, it is obvious that it will turn out that way.
Moreover, nowadays there are too many ways to apply for loan.
A Person who don’t want to go bank, can use mobile application which serve non face to face loan service
Those are my ideas. Finally, I don’t think that it’s good idea to borrow money from a friend.
강사 첨삭
Hi Philip!
Thank you for answering the question.
Good job!
~~ Teacher Mia ~~
I think that it is not a good idea to borrow money from a friend
>> I think it is not a good idea to borrow money from a friend.
There are several reasons to support my opinion
>> Here are some of my reasons to support my opinion:
First of all, To borrow money from a friend can make their relationship shaky.
>> First of all, borrowing money from a friend can cause a problem with their relationship.
If a debtor can’t repay within the period, it is obvious that it will turn out that way.
>> If a debtor can\'t pay within the period they agreed then they might have problems.
Moreover, nowadays there are too many ways to apply for loan.
>> Moreover, there are so many ways these days to apply for a loan.
A Person who don’t want to go bank, can use mobile application which serve non face to face loan service
>> For a person who can\'t go to the bank, he can use mobile applications to apply for a loan.
Those are my ideas. Finally, I don’t think that it’s good idea to borrow money from a friend.
>> Those are my ideas and as a conclusion, it\'s not a good idea to borrow money from a friend.
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