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Two days ago,I dicided to go on a diet and I guess I might be gone on forever. It's quit stressful for me that almost girls around me are slim and skinny.
Whenver I went on a dait, I always ate less amount of food and I thought that was the most easier way to lose my waight. But now I realized that that was the most difficult way to maintain my healthy mental. I can't live without dilicious food.LOL I did hard enough to far away from a high calorie food. I think that's enough. I'll just exercise not quit food. Eating is one of the great pleasure in my life and I'm one hundred percent sure that people are going to agree with me.
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Hi there [이름]!
I\'m glad that you sent this composition to me.
Thank you for sharing your thoughts. I\'m happy that you realized that not eating at all is not good for your health.
Going on a diet doesn\'t mean not eating anything. It means eating the right foods and doing healthy stuffs.
When you want to maintain a good body figure, regularly exercise. But it doesn\'t mean that your\'re going to overwork yourself.
Just do the proper exercises and eat nutritious foods.
See you tomorrow!
~Teacher Shanee
>>Two days ago, I decided to go on a diet and I guess I might continue this forever.
It\'s quit stressful for me that almost girls around me are slim and skinny.
>>It\'s quite stressful for me that almost all girls around me are slim and skinny.
Whenver I went on a dait, I always ate less amount of food and I thought that was the most easier way to lose my waight.
Whenver I went on a dait, I always ate less amount of food and I thought that was the most easier way to lose my waight.
>>During the times that I was on a diet, I always ate less amount of foods because I thought that was the easiest way to lose weight.
But now I realized that that was the most difficult way to maintain my healthy mental.
>>But now, I realized that it\'s a way that can negatively affect my healthy body and mind.
I can\'t live without dilicious food.
>>I can\'t live without delicious foods.
LOL I did hard enough to far away from a high calorie food.
>>LOL I did hard enought to stay away from high calorie foods.
I think that\'s enough.
>>Correct!
I\'ll just exercise not quit food.
>>I\'ll just regularly exercise and I won\'t quit eating delicious foods.
Eating is one of the great pleasure in my life and I\'m one hundred percent sure that people are going to agree with me.
>>>Correct! (pleasures)
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