Enjoy or save for earning money
학생이 쓴 원문
Dear [Name],
I have save the money that I and wife earn.
Almost 10 years, we could not go to travel any where.
So I bought a apartment without lones.
Now after marriage, 21 years, I had six stores and one son.
Of course I had no lones until now.
I have many friends. They said you were a successful man. But I think still not. my wife and I have a dream for buying building in Seoul. so I will do my best to work this company for more money and my future.
After 10 years, I am going to achiev it and will enjoy wuth money.
강사 첨삭
1. I have save the money that I and wife earn.
>>I have saved the money that me and my wife earned.
2. Almost 10 years, we could not go to travel any where.
>>For almost 10 years, we did not travel any where.
3. So I bought a apartment without lones.
>>So, I bought an apartment without loans.
4. Now after marriage, 21 years, I had six stores and one son.
>>Now after being married for 21 years, I have six stores and one son.
5. Of course I had no lones until now.
>>Of course, I have no loans until now.
6. I have many friends.
>>CORRECT
OR>>I have a lot of friends.
7. They said you were a successful man.
>>They said I was a successful man.
8. But I think still not.
>>But I think I\'m still not.
9. my wife and I have a dream for buying building in Seoul.
>>My wife and I have a dream of buying a building in Seoul.
10. so I will do my best to work this company for more money and my future.
>>So, I will do my best to work in this company for more money and my future.
11.After 10 years, I am going to achiev it and will enjoy wuth money.
>>After 10 years, I am going to achieve it and I will enjoy with money.
Good sentences.
- T. Melody ^^
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