enjoy your life.

2010-11-22 · 첨삭 강사 lei

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I went to the Noche De Salsa where It is the place for Salsa dance which is a latin dance. Because my friend visited me her performance of bigining level. I have never experienced such a enthusiastic atmosphere. My boy friend was the same. He looked uncomfortable at first. He repeatedly asked me "When are we go out? when is it over?" So I said "When she is over we can go out." But as soon as the show started we sank into the hot show. When we went out the show room my boy friend told me. "It is unfair. look ! They enjoy their life. But why do I can't?" I knew. He always do his best. He might be hard. So I said " oh honey~ you are the best one in my life. we just go into the world. It is the time to start our life."

강사 첨삭

Hi J!!! Wow, I didn't know that you dance. ^^ Salsa is a kind of sexy and full spirited dance so I can imagine you having fun. It was so sweet of you to comfort your boyfriend that way. He is so lucky. Well start your week right. See you on Wednesday! Lei J   I went to the Noche De Salsa where It is the place for Salsa dance which is a latin dance.>>I went to the Noche de Salsa, aplace for the latin dance Salsa.Because my friend visited me her performance of bigining level.>>Because my friend just visited me, her performance level is beginner.I have never experienced such an enthusiastic atmosphere.>>correctMy boy friend was the same.>>correctHe looked uncomfortable at first. >>correctHe repeatedly asked me "When are we go out? when is it over?">>he repeatedly asked me, When are we going out? When will it be over?So I said "When she is over we can go out.">>correctBut as soon as the show started we sank into the hot show.>>correctWhen we went out the show room my boy friend told me.>>correct"It is unfair. look ! >>correct They enjoy their life. >>correct But why do I can't?">>But why can't I do that?I knew. >>correct He always do his best. >>correct He might be hard.>>It might be hard for him. >>It must be hard fo rhim.So I said " oh honey~ you are the best one in my life. >>correct we just go into the world. >>correct It is the time to start our life." >>correct

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