Essay - If I had a milion dollars
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These days the million dollars are not a large amount of money due to the inflation. With the million dollars, we are not able change your life although we can pay off some debts and take a burden off your shoulders a bit. Let’s say if I had ten million dollars. If I had ten million dollars, the first thing I would do is to get rid of the debts completely and go to a hospital for a thorough physical check-up to make sure my health condition is okay. And take some insurance for any unexpected accidents and illness. Of courses my mother should see a doctor as well to ensure that the pain in her back is to be diagnosed and cured as soon as possible. Health comes first above all other things. Next I will go to the United States to study marketing and might get a doctoral degree. Buying a house or a luxury car and traveling other countries are not on my to-do-list as priorities, but rather I would like to invest it further to make myself a more capable and respectable person.
강사 첨삭
Hello there!!!
a pleasant Monday afternoon!
You\'re indeed right!!! A million dollars could aid us but it can\'t change our lives totally! ;)
Anyway, your answers were pretty amazing and impressive because you think more on
self improvement than material stuff unlike most people.
Kindly check the corrections I made here...
Have a nice day and see you!
T.Nina
These days the million dollars are not a large amount of money due to the inflation.
>> These days a million dollars is not a large amount of money due to the inflation.
With the million dollars, we are not able change your life although we can pay off some debts and take a burden off your shoulders a bit.
>> With a million dollars, we are not able to change our lives although we can pay off some debts and take a burden off our shoulders a bit.
Let’s say if I had ten million dollars.
>> CORRECT!!
If I had ten million dollars, the first thing I would do is to get rid of the debts completely and go to a hospital for a thorough physical check-up to make sure my health condition is okay.
>>CORRECT!!
And take some insurance for any unexpected accidents and illness.
>>CORRECT!!
Of courses my mother should see a doctor as well to ensure that the pain in her back is to be diagnosed and cured as soon as possible.
>>CORRECT!!
Health comes first above all other things.
>>CORRECT!!
Next I will go to the United States to study marketing and might get a doctoral degree.
>> Next I will go to the United States to study marketing and might get a doctorate degree.
Buying a house or a luxury car and traveling other countries are not on my to-do-list as priorities, but rather I would like to invest it further to make myself a more capable and respectable person.
>> Buying a house or a luxury car and traveling to other countries are not on my to-do-list as priorities, but rather I would like to invest it further to make myself a more capable and respectable person.
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