Essay - modern technology

2013-03-25 · 첨삭 강사 Dorcy

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I’m a bit skeptical about the opinion that the modern technology makes life more convenient or was life better when technology was simpler. Yes, to some extent, without a doubt, we are benefiting from the model technology such as we can get a plenty of information on internet, buying goods without bothering ourselves going to shopping malls, submitting documents, exchanging message instantly or real time with a person who lives in the other part of globe, contacting a person anytime we want via a cellular phone, etc. However, there are also huge adverse effects due to the technologies. Think about a computer. When a personal computer was rolled out in the market, people expected that we would face paperless working environments and have more free time because the computer can expedite the process and bring out a result much faster. In reality, it is the opposite. We are now struggling with a pile of papers that are ten or 100 times more than before and always pressed for time.

강사 첨삭

Hello there!
A cool Monday morning to you.
I have read your composition and I think agree with your opinion.
I think all kinds of technologies have their advantage and disadvantages.

However, it is up to us to use them to our advantage.

Enjoy your day!See you!
~~T. Nina~~

I’m a bit skeptical about the opinion that the modern technology makes life more convenient or was life better when technology was simpler.

>>I\'m a bit skeptical about the opinion that modern technology makes life more convenient.Or was life better when technology was simpler?

 Yes, to some extent, without a doubt, we are benefiting from the model technology such as we can get a plenty of information on internet, buying goods without bothering ourselves going to shopping malls, submitting documents, exchanging message instantly or real time with a person who lives in the other part of globe, contacting a person anytime we want via a cellular phone, etc.

>>Yes, to some extent, without a doubt, we are benefiting from the modern technology such as we can get  plenty of information on internet, buying goods without bothering ourselves going to shopping malls, submitting documents, exchanging messages instantly  with a person who lives in the other part of globe, contacting a person anytime we want via a cellular phone, etc.

 However, there are also huge adverse effects due to the technologies.

>>However, there are also huge adverse effects of technologies.

Think about a computer.

>>Think of a computer.

 When a personal computer was rolled out in the market, people expected that we would face paperless working environments and have more free time because the computer can expedite the process and bring out a result much faster.

>> When a personal computer is rolled out in the market, people expect that we would face paperless working environments and have more free time because the computer can expedite the process and bring out  results much faster.

 In reality, it is the opposite.
>>Correct!

We are now struggling with a pile of papers that are ten or 100 times more than before and always pressed for time.
>>We are now struggling with  piles of papers that are ten or 100 times more than before and are always pressing time. 

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