Essay - What are some bad points about social networking?

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A Hindsight about social networking is an addiction. 

>> In hindsight, social networking is an addiction.
There are lots of things to do around us with limited time.

>> CORRECT

But we might have a moment to explore what other people to without any purpose to open unconsciously open social apps.

>> However, we might have a moment to explore what other people do without any purpose. As a result, we unconsciously open social apps.

I think it is one of addictive symptoms.

>> I think it this one of the addictive symptoms.
Social networking is good way to keep in touch with others but once we lose the time control it become a bad time killer.
>> Social networking is a good way to keep in touch with others but once we lose the time control, it might become a bad way to kill time.
Moreover, when people live too much time on the social world, people seems to focus how to show their life not how to see their life.

>> Moreover, when people live too much time on the social world, people seems to focus on how to show their life not how to see their life.

Finding how to live happier and healthier is fundamental rather than how to share daily life.

>> CORRECT