essay 10
학생이 쓴 원문
Hello, myname is Ryan. today i will tell you \'Do kids need toys? Why?\"
I think kids need toy.That`s because friends can build friendships if they play with toys.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Ryan!
Here\'s your corrected composition. I appreciate your sending it.
Hope to see you next time!
Cheers,
Jean~~
Do kids need toys? Why?
today i will tell you \'Do kids need toys? Why?\"
>> Today, I want to tell you why kids need toys.
I think kids need toy.
>> I think children need toys.
That`s because friends can build friendships if they play with toys.
>> OR: Toys can help children bond and build friendships.
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