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2021-01-08 · 첨삭 강사 Rina

학생이 쓴 원문

My cousin sister (hannah) is really good at everything. so I really like my cousin sister. Why I like my cousin?? because my cousin sister always play with me, she gives a lot of snacks and pens, she good at study so I always ask difficult questions to my cousin so my cousin sister teaches difficult questions, and My cousin sister have a lot of great cook recipe so she always cooks delicious foods!! my cousin sister is like umm...an all around robot I think anyone read this essay. You will agree on this essay. but really sadly... I am not have a one\'s own sister. so i\'m really sad....just I have really pretty and perfect cousin sister... but It is okay!! but now a days she is middle school first so she sometimes come to my home...TT so I love my cousin sister and I\'m really happy with my cousin sister. and

강사 첨삭

Hello Hannah! ^^
I am so happy to hear about your female cousin~
You have made really good sentences!
Keep it up!
I am sure Hyona also loves you very much! ^_^
You are a wonderful cousin to her too!
Thank you for this!

- T. Rina


1. My cousin sister (hannah) is really good at everything. 
>> My female cousin, Hannah, is really good at everything.

2. so I really like my cousin sister.
>> So, I really like my cousin. 

3. Why I like my cousin?? 
>> Why do I like my cousin?

4. because my cousin sister always play with me, she gives a lot of snacks and pens
>> Because my cousin always plays with me and she gives me a lot of snacks and pens. 

5. she good at study so I always ask difficult questions to my cousin so my cousin sister teaches difficult questions, 
>> She is good at studying, so I always ask difficult questions to her. 

6. and My cousin sister have a lot of great cook recipe so she always cooks delicious foods!! 
>> And she has a lot of great recipes, so she always cooks delicious foods. 

7. my cousin sister is like umm...an all around robot.
>> My cousin is like an all-around robot.

8. I think anyone read this essay. You will agree on this essay. 
>> I think anyone who will read this essay will agree with me. 

9. but really sadly...  I am not have a one\'s own sister. so i\'m really sad....
>> But I don\'t have my own sister, so I am really sad. 

10. just I have really pretty and perfect cousin sister... 
>> I just have a really pretty and perfect female cousin.

11. but It is okay!! 
>> CORRECT!

12. but now a days she is middle school first so she sometimes come to my home...TT 
>> But nowadays, she is a middle school student, so she sometimes comes to my home. 

13. so I love my cousin sister and I\'m really happy with my cousin sister. 
>> I love my cousin and I am really happy with her. 

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