Essay
학생이 쓴 원문
The current Birth rate in Korea is remarkably low.
Because I’m a working mother, I fully understand that the Birth rate is low.
If I become the most influential woman in the world, I want to contribute to setting up an environment where I can give birth and raise children as much as I want.
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Good evening [이름] K[이름]g. Thank you for taking the time to express your opinion or thought regarding this topic. Your sentences were really amazing. There were just some minimal corrections. I appreciate it. ^_^
T. Irene
The current Birth rate in Korea is remarkably low.
>>> Correct.
Because I’m a working mother, I fully understand that the Birth rate is low.
>>> I fully understand this situation because I\'m a working mom.
If I become the most influential woman in the world, I want to contribute to setting up an environment where I can give birth and raise children as much as I want.
Because I’m a working mother, I fully understand that the Birth rate is low.
>>> I fully understand this situation because I\'m a working mom.
If I become the most influential woman in the world, I want to contribute to setting up an environment where I can give birth and raise children as much as I want.
>>> If I become the most influential woman in the world, I want to contribute by setting up an environment where I can give birth and raise as many children as I want.
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