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학생이 쓴 원문
Don’t blame yourself for making a lot of mistakes when you start first.
There are always mistakes in the first work.
When I raise a child, I also blamed myself. Because I had a lot of difficulties and mistakes.
However, I’m just was exhausted and there was no development in childcare.
After acknowledging that childcare was the first time, my mind became lighter and I was able to raise children joyfully.
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T. Irene
Don’t blame yourself for making a lot of mistakes when you start first.
>>> Don’t blame yourself for making a lot of mistakes when first started.
There are always mistakes in the first work.
There are always mistakes in the first work.
>>> There are always some mistakes at first.
When I raise a child, I also blamed myself. Because I had a lot of difficulties and mistakes.
When I raise a child, I also blamed myself. Because I had a lot of difficulties and mistakes.
>>> When I raised a child, I also blamed myself because I had a lot of difficulties and made mistakes.
However, I’m just was exhausted and there was no development in childcare.
However, I’m just was exhausted and there was no development in childcare.
>>> However, I was just so exhausted and there were no developments in the childcare system.
After acknowledging that childcare was the first time, my mind became lighter and I was able to raise children joyfully.
After acknowledging that childcare was the first time, my mind became lighter and I was able to raise children joyfully.
>>> After acknowledging that childcare is difficult the first time, my mind became lighter and I was able to take care of the children joyfully.
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