Essay

2021-11-11 · 첨삭 강사 Irene

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When i went on a trip to Osaka with my family. I used Google Maps to find our destination. However there was problem of my cell phone suddenly and I couldn\'t use Google Maps anymore. I asked for help from someone around me, and fortunately, he kindly guided me and we can arrive our destination safely.

강사 첨삭

Good evening ma\'am [이름] K[이름]g. It\'s nice to hear your opinion about the topic in the essay. ^_^
T. Irene
When i went on a trip to Osaka with my family I used Google Maps to find our destination. 
>>> Correct. 
OR
>>> When I went on a trip to Osaka with my family, I used Google Maps to locate our destination. 
However there was problem of my cell phone suddenly and I couldn\'t use Google Maps anymore.
>>> However there was a sudden problem with my cell phone  and I couldn\'t use Google Maps anymore.
I asked for help from someone around me, and fortunately, he kindly guided me and we can arrive our destination safely.
>>> So what I did was ask assistance from a person near me and fortunately, he was kind enough to guide me so I was able to arrive safely at my destination. 





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