Essay
학생이 쓴 원문
I don\'t know what other people think, but I\'m sensitive how I show to the others, so I always tried to do diet. Before, I tried to eat one meal in a day cause I hated exercising. But it was bad for my health. In my early 20s, I didn\'t feel strange cause my physical strength was good. But in my late 20s, I felt my health was getting bad. So, I\'m trying to do exercising and change my eating habit for my health and diet. 
강사 첨삭
Hi, Ji O!
I agree with you. When we are young, we don’t really notice much difference in our health, but as we get older, we can already feel changes in our bodies. That’s why we should try to stay healthy and do something to prevent further harm.
- T. Caitlyn
I don\'t know what other people think, but I\'m sensitive how I show to the others, so I always tried to do diet.
>> I don’t know what other people think, but I’m sensitive about how I appear to others, so I have always tried to diet.
Before, I tried to eat one meal in a day cause I hated exercising.
>> Before, I tried to eat only one meal a day because I hated exercising.
But it was bad for my health.
>> CORRECT
In my early 20s, I didn\'t feel strange cause my physical strength was good.
>> In my early 20s, I didn’t feel any effects because my physical strength was good.
But in my late 20s, I felt my health was getting bad.
>> But in my late 20s, I felt my health was declining.
So, I\'m trying to do exercising and change my eating habit for my health and diet.
>> So, I’m trying to exercise and change my eating habits for my health and diet.
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