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I think it\'s possible to be healthy without exercising regularly. Nowdays, healthy food such as medicine have developed and eat balanced food can keep our health. However, exercising will help our balanced life, and it can be more better effects than not exercising.
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Hello, Ji O!
You are right! Nowadays, thanks to science, we have developed supplements and medicines that can help us maintain our health even without exercising. Some are even diet medicines designed to reduce body fat. But I also agree with what you mentioned: exercising is still better than not doing it at all.
- T. Caitlyn
I think it\'s possible to be healthy without exercising regularly.
>> CORRECT
Nowdays, healthy food such as medicine have developed and eat balanced food can keep our health.
>> Nowadays, healthy foods and medicine have developed, and eating a balanced diet can keep us healthy.
However, exercising will help our balanced life, and it can be more better effects than not exercising.
>> However, exercising helps us maintain a balanced life, and it has better effects than not exercising.
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