Essay
학생이 쓴 원문
When I was a middle school student, I was going to Europe with my mom. It was a pakage tour, so we took a bus for transportation during visited several cities. At that time, I did\'t really like travel, and did\'t enjoyed travel a lot, so I did\'t fell much merit in during time. However, looking back now as an adult, I realize how precious and happy moments that is childhood memories with my mom without stress of school and job hunting. I\'ve mostly used buses and subways on other trips, but the most memorable experience was the travel to Europe with my mom.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Ji O!
I would agree with you on this. Sometimes, I also feel like traveling is tiring, but looking back at those memories, the experiences we had and the people we were with are what we can cherish and consider precious.
- T. Caitlyn
When I was a middle school student, I was going to Europe with my mom.
>> When I was a middle school student, I went to Europe with my mom.
It was a pakage tour, so we took a bus for transportation during visited several cities.
>> It was a package tour, so we took a bus for transportation while visiting several cities.
At that time, I did\'t really like travel, and did\'t enjoyed travel a lot, so I did\'t fell much merit in during time.
>> At that time, I didn’t really like traveling and didn’t enjoy it much, so I didn’t feel there was much value in that time.
However, looking back now as an adult, I realize how precious and happy moments that is childhood memories with my mom without stress of school and job hunting.
>> However, looking back now as an adult, I realize how precious and happy those childhood memories with my mom were, without the stress of school and job hunting.
I\'ve mostly used buses and subways on other trips, but the most memorable experience was the travel to Europe with my mom.
>> I’ve mostly used buses and subways on other trips, but the most memorable experience was traveling to Europe with my mom.
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