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2012-08-29 · 첨삭 강사 Ritchel

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Q. Where do you see yourself 10 years from now. A. I will see myself in the foreign school, 10 years from now. My job will be teacher. After 10 years from now, I will be recognized teacher. After graduation and becoming teacher, I will experience and research about Korea's educational system. Then, I will spend the 3 year studying abroad for Korea's Educational System. Now, I don't know that what country I will go. Maybe the country's education will be developed in that day. p.s. Above paragraph is only my hope. Maybe my idea is after all impractical. In Korea, Educational background is so important and influence for person's life. In order to this reason, maybe after 10 years from now, I will be just teach students in Korea's school classroom. But! I will be happy surely because I love teaching and I think 'teacher' job is very worthwhile!

강사 첨삭

Hello there! I think you would become a great teacher! I hope that some day you will achieve that dream. Don\'t lose hope, okay?   I\'ll talk to you again tomorrow. Take care and have a good one! Q. Where do you see yourself 10 years from now.A. I will see myself in the foreign school, 10 years from now. >>I see myself in a foreign school 10 years from now.My job will be teacher. >>My job will be a teacher. >>I will be a teacher.After 10 years from now, I will be recognized teacher. >>After 10 years, I will be recognized as a teacher.After graduation and becoming teacher, I will experience and research about Korea\'s educational system. >>After graduating and becoming a teacher, I will experience and research about Korea\'s educational system.Then, I will spend the 3 year studying abroad for Korea\'s Educational System. >>Then I will spend 3 years studying abroad about Korea\'s educational system.Now, I don\'t know that what country I will go. >>Now, I don\'t know what country I will go to. >>I still don\'t have any plans as to what country I would be going to. Maybe the country\'s education will be developed in that day.>>Maybe my country\'s educational system will be developed when the time comes.p.s. Above paragraph is only my hope. >>P.S. The paragraph above is only my wish/ dream. Maybe my idea is after all impractical. >>CORRECT >>I think my idea is impractical.In Korea, Educational background is so important and influence for person\'s life. >>In Korea, the educational background is so important because it has a big influence on a person\'s life.In order to this reason, maybe after 10 years from now, I will be just teach students in Korea\'s school classroom. >>Because of this reason, maybe after 10 years I will just be teaching students in a Korean school/classroom.But! I will be happy surely because I love teaching and I think \'teacher\' job is very worthwhile! >>Nevertheless, I will surely be happy because I love teaching and I think a teacher\'s job is worthwhile.

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