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2012-09-07 · 첨삭 강사 Ritchel

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Q. What can you say about child soldiers? A. I think that child soldiers must not be exist. If some countries recognize the existence of child soldiers, that countries commit a fault for children. I think that children have to be protect than anybody. They are the nation's hope and they have infinite potentiality. Also, they will be characters leading our future. Although a war will begin, children have the rights to be recieved education, protect and love, not the rights to be child soldiers. p.s. ritcher! I'm sorry about yesterday's essay. Yesterday, I was very busy, so I couldn't check the word's spelling. Nowadays, I write essay using Galluxy Tab(such as I-pad). So If I don't check the spelling, spellings are mess. T.T I will do my best. See ya! :-)

강사 첨삭

Happy Friday, [이름]! What you have said is so true! A child must not be a part of war and should not witness the violence around him. Children must be protected from experiencing such kind of situation. Thank you so much for today. Have a wonderful weekend!  I\'ll see you Monday! Take care! Q. What can you say about child soldiers?A. I think that child soldiers must not be exist. >> CORRECT >> I think that they should not allow child soldiers.If some countries recognize the existence of child soldiers, that countries commit a fault for children.>> If some countries acknowledge child soldiers, those countries made a wrong decision for their children. I think that children have to be protect than anybody. >> I think that children should be protected by everybody.They are the nation\'s hope and they have infinite potentiality. >> They are the nation\'s hope and they have infinite potentials.Also, they will be characters leading our future. >> Also, they will be leading our future.Although a war will begin, children have the rights to be recieved education, protect and love, not the rights to be child soldiers.>> Although there are wars, children have the right to have good education, to receive love and protection, and they don\'t have a  right to become soldiers at a young age.p.s. ritcher! >>P.S. Ritchel! >>P.S. Ritchel, >>P.S. Ritchel. I\'m sorry about yesterday\'s essay. >> CORRECT >>I\'m sorry about my essay yesterday.Yesterday, I was very busy, so I couldn\'t check the word\'s spelling. >> CORRECT >>I did a lot of things yesterday so I wasn\'t able to check my spelling.Nowadays, I write essay using Galluxy Tab(such as I-pad). >>Nowadays, I write my essay using my Galaxy Tab (it\'s like an ipad).So If I don\'t check the spelling, spellings are mess. T.T >>So if don\'t check the spelling it becomes messy. I will do my best. >> CORRECT See ya! :-) >> CORRECT >>See you.  

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