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2012-09-14 · 첨삭 강사 Ritchel

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Q. What are you planning to do this thanksgiving holiday? A. I will go to my hometown, Dae-gu. I will have to help my mom. I have a lots of relations and they will come to my house. So, our family is very busy every thanksgiving holiday. Especially, mother and I will have to make many foods for visitors. It will be so hard work. But I like thanksgiving holiday! Because I can meet my relations in a long time and I can eat many kinds of food! (Altough I make the food....) First of all, I'm very happy that I can go to my house on the pretext of thanksgiving day!

강사 첨삭

Happy Friday, [이름]! I think this Thanksgiving will be unforgettable for you because you will spending time with your loved ones. That is nice!  Don\'t eat too much you might get fat.  I know the food is good since you and your mom will be preparing them. Anyway, have a nice weekend and take care! I\'ll talk to you again on Monday. Q. What are you planning to do this thanksgiving holiday?A. I will go to my hometown, Dae-gu. >>CORRECT >>I will be visiting my hometown in Daegu. I will have to help my mom. >>CORRECT I have a lots of relations and they will come to my house. >> I have lots of relatives and they will be coming to our house. So, our family is very busy every thanksgiving holiday. >>CORRECT Especially, mother and I will have to make many foods for visitors. >>My mother and I have to prepare lots of food for the visitors. It will be so hard work. >>CORRECT But I like thanksgiving holiday! >>CORRECT Because I can meet my relations in a long time and I can eat many kinds of food! (Altough I make the food....) >>I like it because I can spend time with my relatives whom I haven\'t seen for a long time and I can eat many kinds of food (although I prepared them). First of all, I\'m very happy that I can go to my house on the pretext of thanksgiving day! >> I\'m very happy that I can go to my house on the pretext of thanksgiving day.  

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