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One day suddenly I got the phone from some guy
he said he was the boss when I worked at the restaurant. I was surprised because I got the new mobile phone about 2 months ago.
I didn't know how he found out my phone number but I didn't care about that
Anyway, we say hello to each other and had a talked
while we talking on the phone I wondered the reason why he called me
and as soon as he asked me that I worked with him
I felt nice and I said "I'd love to but I can't work with you right now because my contract is a month left to expire at this job. So as soon as expire this contract I work with you but how? when? where?"
and he said "It's nice. but if you are OK, I want to ask you that you run my karaoke place in Kondae as a branch manager"
naturally I was so surprised. because every branch manager was thirty or forty who has lots of experience when I worked in there.
And I asked him "thanks for the ask but I really want to know why did you choose me without you've known many people
강사 첨삭
Hi there, Aaron!
Thank you for your composition! That\'s a great experience! It only shows how amazing you are! Keep it up! Take care and have a wonderful day!
T. JanE ^^
One day suddenly I got the phone from some guy
>> One day, I received a sudden call from a guy.he said he was the boss when I worked at the restaurant.
>> He said he was the boss in the restaurant where I worked.I was surprised because I got the new mobile phone about 2 months ago.
>> I was surprised because I got a new mobile phone number about 2 months ago.I didn\'t know how he found out my phone number but I didn\'t care about that.
>> Correct Anyway, we say hello to each other and had a talked
>> Anyway, we said hello to each other and talked.while we talking on the phone I wondered the reason why he called me
>> While we\'re talking, I wondered why he called me.and as soon as he asked me that I worked with him I felt nice and I said \"I\'d love to but I can\'t work with you right now because my contract is a month left to expire at this job. So as soon as expire this contract I work with you but how? when? where?\"
>> He asked me to work with him, so I felt good, but I said, \"I\'d love to, but I can\'t work with you now because my contract in this job will expire a month later. As soon as my contract expires, I can work with you. But can you tell me how, when, and where?\"and he said \"It\'s nice. but if you are OK, I want to ask you that you run my karaoke place in Kondae as a branch manager\"
>> He said, \"It\'s nice. But if it\'s okay with you, I want to ask you to run my karaoke place in Kondae as a branch manager.\"naturally I was so surprised. because every branch manager was thirty or forty who has lots of experience when I worked in there.
>> Naturally, I was so surprised because branch managers are in their thirties or forties and have lots of experiences.And I asked him \"thanks for the ask but I really want to know why did you choose me without you\'ve known many people
>> So I told him, \"Thanks for the offer, but I really want to know why you chose me instead of other people you know.\"
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