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학생이 쓴 원문
After I got dismissed from my division, I left Korea for 4 years. I was not able to join an asistant troop. Town defence officers skip me for the reason. After I return Korea, unless I go out to oversea again in 15days I have to join the traing. I droped by the centre and they checked my history and told me I have on training after coming friday. Actually I felt somethings going wrong, now wonder If I didn't go there I wouln't have to join the training so soon. Their job is to arrage date and inform us but that seemed they have many work, so I could skip the training this time too. I don't know why I did that today
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]. It's nice of you to send me this letter and told
me what you did today. Why do they keep guys like you go on trainig? You're
done with your military service, right? So what is the training for?
Well anyway, I wish you made the right decision kkk ^^
After I got dismissed from my division, I left Korea for 4 years.
>>correct
I was not able to join an asistant troop.
>>i wasn't able to join the assistance troop.
Town defence officers skip me for the reason.
>>The town defense officers skipped for a reason.
After I return Korea, unless I go out to oversea again in 15days I have to join the traing.
>>After I returned to Korea, I have to join the training, wellm unless I go overseas again within 15days.
I droped by the centre and they checked my history and told me I have on training after coming friday.
>>I dropped by the centre and they checked on my records.
>>They told me that I have to go on traning this coming Friday.
Actually I felt somethings going wrong, now wonder If I didn't go there I wouln't have to join the training so soon.
>>Actually, I felt something wrong was going on.
>>If I didn't go to the centre, i wouldn't have to join the traning soon.
Their job is to arrage date and inform us but that seemed they have many work, so I could skip the training this time too.
>>Their job is to arrange the date and inform us but I think they're overloaded with work.
>>Perhaps I could skip this training too.
I don't know why I did that today
>>Correct
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