Essay
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Will the Internet bring people of the world closer together?
Without a doubt, the internet brings people of the world closer together. The Internet is a great community tool. The internet has changed the world as we knew it just 20 years ago. Many people can come online to meet someone from the other side of the world. People can use Social Networking sites to communicate with others, as well as blogging on the Internet. While there is less face-to-face interactions happening due to the Internet, there are many more interactions that would not otherwise be possible taking place, due to the Internet. Email and instant messaging allow communications to take place all over the world. Before the Internet, there was still the telephone. However, the amount of information and speed that it could be shared was very much limited. To business, the Internet have given business people a much more a chance to manage relationships with their customers and clients more effective and quickly.
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Will the Internet bring people of the world closer together?Without a doubt, the internet brings people of the world closer together.
>>>CORRECT!!!
The Internet is a great community tool.
>>>CORRECT!!!
The internet has changed the world as we knew it just 20 years ago.
>>>CORRECT!! or 20 years ago, the internet has changed the world.
Many people can come online to meet someone from the other side of the world.
>>>Many people can go online to meet someone from the other side of the world.
People can use Social Networking sites to communicate with others, as well as blogging on the Internet.
>>>CORRECT!!!
While there is less face-to-face interactions happening due to the Internet, there are many more interactions that would not otherwise be possible taking place, due to the Internet.
>>>While there is less face-to-face interactions happening due to the Internet, there are many interactions that would not otherwise be possible taking place without the help of the internet.
Email and instant messaging allow communications to take place all over the world.
>>>CORRECT!!!
Before the Internet, there was still the telephone.
>>>CORRECT!!!
However, the amount of information and speed that it could be shared was very much limited.
>>>CORRECT!!!
To business, the Internet have given business people a much more a chance to manage relationships with their customers and clients more effective and quickly.
>>>CORRECT!!!
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