essay~~
학생이 쓴 원문
Q: what do you think about subway in Seoul.
A: The Seoul subway is very complicated when someone use that first time. but when you learn how can use that, then that will be the best transportation to get to your destination. It is very punctual, convenience and also the price is cheep. Our subway is also very clean and fresh, it is warm in winter and in summer it is very cool. And you can go everywhere in Seoul and near of Seoul by subway. If my foreigner friends come to Korea. I highly recommend to use subway in their journey.
강사 첨삭
Good morning again [이름] Na!
It is a very cold Tuesday morning here today. How about there?
Again, you gave me a remarkable composition today.
But try to avoid using personal pronouns and mix it with just nouns.
You need to be consistent.
So if you started your sentence with a pronoun, you need to continuously use it.
Check how I wrote the corrections and if ever you have any questions, ask me about it later.
See you this afternoon.
Have a good one.
Always,
~Aimee^^
>> Q: What do you thinks about the subways in Seoul?
A: The Seoul subway is very complicated when someone use that first time.
A: The Seoul subway is very complicated when someone use that first time.
>> The subways in Seoul are very complicated if someone is going to use it for the first time.
but when you learn how can use that, then that will be the best transportation to get to your destination.
>> But when someone get used to it, this can be one of the best transportation for people to get to their destination.
It is very punctual, convenience and also the price is cheep.
>> It is very fast, convenient, and also the price is cheap.
Our subway is also very clean and fresh, it is warm in winter and in summer it is very cool.
>> Correct]
>> Our subways are also very clean and look fresh. It is warn in winter and cool during summer.
And you can go everywhere in Seoul and near of Seoul by subway.
>> One can also go everywhere in Seoul and the nearby cities too by using the subway.
If my foreigner friends come to Korea. I highly recommend to use subway in their journey.
>> If ever my foreign friends come to Korea, I will highly recommend them to use the subway for their journeys.
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