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I will take three men for helping me. So I will be a polyandry woman. I will make those guys to do everything for me. Make drinking water from the sea water, fishing, making houses, making a fire and hunting some animals. I hope that they won't be fight each other about me. I watched the movie 'Cast away' many years ago. It was so impressed to me. Especially when Tom hanks lost his best friend on the sea, I felt sadness. I still remember the name of his best friend, is wilson(the volleyball). And this year I watched 'Life of Pi'. I really love this movie. The story is very interesting. The hero is a boy from India. He's family has a zoo(many kind of animals). One day the father decided to go to Canada with their animals by a big ship. Suddenly they encountered big storm middle of the ocean, and everyone died except the boy. He found a life boat and got on the boat, but in the boat there was a lion. Wow how did he do??? Are you curious? Then watch it. hohoho Anyway the boy had to be with the lion. They are in the same situation. Finally he and the lion were arrived at the sea of Mexico. It took 227days from India ocean to sea of Mexico through Pacific ocean. They had survived just with a small life boat. More amazing is that this story is real. And the video is very beautiful. If you didn't watch that movie yet, I highly recommend to you.
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Good morning [이름] Na!
Owww wow...
Taking three men with you is really really an unexpected answer.
KKK I think it is realistic though. hahahaha
Yep, I watched Castaway too.
It was really a story of survival and I commend him for being optimistic.
But I haven\'t watched the Life of PI yet.
I wanted to watch it before but I never had the time.
Based on your story, I think your summarized it so well that I understand it even without watching it.
Good job!.
I will try to look for a DVD copy of this movie.
See you later^^
Always,
~Aimee^^
>> I will take three men with me.
So I will be a polyandry woman.
>> Correct (hahahaha)
I will make those guys to do everything for me.
>> I will make those guys do everything for me.
Make drinking water from the sea water, fishing, making houses, making a fire and hunting some animals.
>> Thinks like making a drinking water from sea water, catch some fish, build a house, make fire and hunts animals for food.
I hope that they won\'t be fight each other about me.
>> I hope that they won\'t fight each other because of me.
I watched the movie \'Cast away\' many years ago.
>> Correct
It was so impressed to me.
>> I was so impressed with it.
Especially when Tom hanks lost his best friend on the sea, I felt sadness.
>> Especially when Tom Hanks lost his best friend at sea. I felt sad.
I still remember the name of his best friend, is wilson(the volleyball).
>> I still remember the name of his best friend which is Wilson. (the volleyball)
And this year I watched \'Life of Pi\'.
>> Correct
I really love this movie.
>> Correct
The story is very interesting.
>> Correct
The hero is a boy from India.
>> Correct
He\'s family has a zoo(many kind of animals).
>> His family has a zoo.
One day the father decided to go to Canada with their animals by a big ship.
>> One day his father decided to go to Canada with their animals by ship.
Suddenly they encountered big storm middle of the ocean, and everyone died except the boy.
>> Suddenly, they encountere a terrible storm at the middle of their voyage. Everyone died except for the boy.
He found a life boat and got on the boat, but in the boat there was a lion.
>> He found a life bout and he got in, not realizing that their is a tiger on it.
Wow how did he do???
>> Correct
Are you curious?
>> Correct
Then watch it.
>> Correct
hohoho
>> Correct
Anyway the boy had to be with the lion.
>> Correct
They are in the same situation.
>> Correct
Finally he and the lion were arrived at the sea of Mexico.
>> Finally, the boy and the tiger arrived at the Sea of Mexico.
It took 227days from India ocean to sea of Mexico through Pacific ocean.
>> It took about 227 days from India to the sea of Mexico through the Pacific Ocean.
They had survived just with a small life boat.
>> Correct
More amazing is that this story is real.
>> The most amazing thing about this story is that it is real.
And the video is very beautiful.
>> Correct
If you didn\'t watch that movie yet, I highly recommend to you.
>> If you haven\'t watched the movie yet, I recommend that you watch it.
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