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I want to make unification with North korea. In my opinion unification is the biggest task with us. Of course it's never easy, that's why we've divided into 2 countries still now. We are almost different countries, culture, thinking, politic even the language. When I watched some North korea's TV program, sometimes I couldn't understand what are they saying. The time is going to going, it becomes hard to unify with North korea. Many people don't care whether unify or not. Because long time was gone after divided. Also we are worry about the big money for unification. Now our economy is quite good, but when we unify with North korea, it must come a big problem to our economy. But I think we should resolve this problem for our countries and the peace of the world. Maybe we need help and agreement from world society. So I will do my best for unification and peace of the world. I think it is better to be a president of UN....We are the world~We are the children~~~♬♩♩♪ hohoho
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I want to make unification with North korea.
>> I want to make peace with North Korea.
In my opinion unification is the biggest task with us.
>> In my opinion, unification is the biggest task for us.
Of course it\'s never easy, that\'s why we\'ve divided into 2 countries still now.
>> Of course, it\'s never easy, that is why we still divided until now.
We are almost different countries, culture, thinking, politic even the language.
>> We are almost 2 different countries in term of culture, thinking, politics and even language.
When I watched some North korea\'s TV program, sometimes I couldn\'t understand what are they saying.
>> Whenever I watch a North Korean TV program, sometimes I couldn\'t understand what they are saying.
The time is going to going, it becomes hard to unify with North korea.
>> As time goes by, it is becoming even more difficult to be unified with them.
Many people don\'t care whether unify or not.
>> Many people don\'t care about unification.
Because long time was gone after divided.
>> It is because, it has already been a long time that we\'ve been divided.
Also we are worry about the big money for unification.
>> Also, we are worried about the expenses which will be spend for the unification.
Now our economy is quite good, but when we unify with North korea, it must come a big problem to our economy.
>> Now, our economy is quite good, but when we unify with North Korea, there would be a big problem in our economy.
But I think we should resolve this problem for our countries and the peace of the world.
>> But I think, we should resolve this problem not just for our country but also for the peace of the whole world.
Maybe we need help and agreement from world society.
>> Maybe we will need help from the other countries.
So I will do my best for unification and peace of the world.
>> Correct
I think it is better to be a president of UN....
>> I think it is better to be a president of The Uited Nations.
We are the world~We are the children~~~♬♩♩♪ hohoho
>> Correct
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