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2013-09-25 · 첨삭 강사 Aimee

학생이 쓴 원문

I‘m a positive girl, so I'm leaving with happiness. Yesterday I ran for 10kms, I'm a strong man, as like iron man. I don't like the man who is lazy in their life, because I enjoy the busy life. I'm a responsible person, so when I do something I do my best. I like activity sports, it is because I'm a energetic person. I like hiking, swimming, running and snow boarding. I have an ability to get along with everybody, that is my big strength. And I'm a calm person, I don't like be angry to anyone. I'm a sincere person, I treat all of the people with sincerity. hohoho In conclusion, I'm a very nice girl in Korea~~~^^ hahahaha

강사 첨삭

Good morning [이름] Na!
Hello girl... kkkk
I think you really are a very nice girl.
Everything about you is good.
I cannot find anything bad that describes you.
I like that you are a positive person.
Maintain who you are because it can be way for people to be close to you even more.
See you later...

Always,
~Aimee^^

I‘m a positive girl, so I\'m leaving with happiness. 
>> I\'m a positive girl that is why I live with happiness.
Yesterday I ran for 10kms, I\'m a strong man, as like iron man. 
>> Yesterday, I ran 10 kms, I\'m a strong woman and I feel like Iron-man.
I don\'t like the man who is lazy in their life, because I enjoy the busy life. 
>> I don\'t like man who are lazy because I enjoy having a busy life.
I\'m a responsible person, so when I do something I do my best.
>> I\'m also a responsible person because when I need to do something, I do my best.
I like activity sports, it is because I\'m a energetic person. 
>> I like activity sports because i\'m an energetic person.
I like hiking, swimming, running and snow boarding.
>> Correct 
I have an ability to get along with everybody, that is my big strength. 
>> My strongest personality is that I get along with everybody.
And I\'m a calm person, I don\'t like be angry to anyone.
>> Correct
I\'m a sincere person, I treat all of the people with sincerity. hohoho
>> Correct
In conclusion, I\'m a very nice girl in Korea~~~^^ hahahaha
>> Correct

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