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I don't like shopping especially a window shopping, I don't understand why people like window shopping, even they didn't buy anything. When I go to the window shopping with my friends, I feel boring. So I prefer buy on the Internet to go to the shop. Usually I buy my things from G-market, it is very popular web-site in Korea. Also I have a discount de[이름] card for G-market. I can get a 5% discount every time if I pay by this card. I'm a VIP member, so they give many coupons every month. So using G-market is a good option to me. Of course near of my home, there is shopping area but I don't use much, except when I buy some groceries.
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>> I don\'t like shopping, especially window shopping. I don\'t understand why people like window shopping even if they are not going to buy anything.
When I go to the window shopping with my friends, I feel boring.
>> When ever I go window shopping with my friends, I feel bored.
So I prefer buy on the Internet to go to the shop.
>> So I prefer buying things online than going to the shops.
Usually I buy my things from G-market, it is very popular web-site in Korea.
>> Correct
Also I have a discount de[이름] card for G-market.
>> Correct
I can get a 5% discount every time if I pay by this card.
>> Correct
I\'m a VIP member, so they give many coupons every month.
>> Correct
So using G-market is a good option to me.
>> That is why using G-market is a very good option for me.
Of course near of my home, there is shopping area but I don\'t use much, except when I buy some groceries.
>> Of course, there\'s a shopping are near my house but I don\'t go there much. Except when I need to buy some groceries.
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