ESSAY

2013-10-10 · 첨삭 강사 Kathrine

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ESSAY: When you are having a bad day, what do you do to make yourself feel better? Does it always work? When I'm having a bad day, I try to be alone for having own times. It means that I try to separate me from outside. For example, I sleep or I go to a cafe where nobody knows me. Then I think what makes the matter worse thoughtfully, and I do my favorite things : to drinking coffee, to read a book, and to listen to music. In fact, I am usually having a bad day cause of my familiy. That's why I try to separate me from outside. There're a lot of complex problems that can't solve at once between family members. So It need to have own times, because It help to think one more and It prevent to behave too emotional.

강사 첨삭

A happy day Ms. [이름]! 

Thanks for sharing here your thoughts.

As they, when a person starts his/her day bad, the day day will be bad for the whole day. 

But I don\'t totally agree with that. 
A person can also make his/her day better though it was bad at the start. 

We all have our own diversions on how to make ourselves better. 

And for you, the things that you have shared is maybe really effective. 
And I hope, you will divert your stress or anger just by working out and not on wrong side. 
Anyway, I\'ll see you again tomorrow! 
Enjoy the rest of the day! 


Always, 
Kathrine ^^


ESSAY: When you are having a bad day, what do you do to make yourself feel better? Does it always work?

When I\'m having a bad day, I try to be alone for having own times.

>>When I\'m having a bad day, I try to be alone to have my own time. 

It means that I try to separate me from outside.

>> It means that I try to separate myself from the others. 

For example, I sleep or I go to a cafe where nobody knows me.

>> correct! 

Then I think what makes the matter worse thoughtfully, and I do my favorite things : to drinking coffee, to read a book, and to listen to music.

>> Then I think what makes the matter worst thoroughly and I do my favorite things like drinking coffee, reading books and listening to music. 
In fact, I am usually having a bad day cause of my familiy.

>> In fact, I am usually having a bad day because of my family. 

That\'s why I try to separate me from outside.

>>  That is why I am trying  to separate myself from the others.  

There\'re a lot of complex problems that can\'t solve at once between family members.

>> There are a lot complicated problems which cannot be solved between the family members. 

So It need to have own times, because It help to think one more and It prevent to behave too emotional.

>> So I need to have my own time because it helps me to think more and it prevents me to become too emotional. 

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