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2013-10-14 · 첨삭 강사 Aimee

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In my opinion, having a open mind is the most important thing during communication. And listening to other's words is also important. So when I talk with people, I try to get a open mind and listen to their words. I'm closer to listener than talker. But some people who have a negative mind to their life or just want to get something for free without effort. Then I scold them to get a positive mind, if they should live. Endless complaining is never helpful our life. So when I communicate with others, I want to be a good listener and good adviser at the same time.

강사 첨삭

Happy Monday [이름] Na!
Having an open mind is also an advantage because you get to learn a lot from others.
Also, making a stand for others is great.
Thank you for reminding me to be open minded in all circumstances.
See you later.

Always,
~Aimee^^

In my opinion, having a open mind is the most important thing during communication. 
>> Correct
And listening to other\'s words is also important. 
>> Correct
So when I talk with people, I try to get a open mind and listen to their words. 
>> So when I talk to people, I try to have an open mind and listen to their words.
I\'m closer to listener than talker. 
>> I\'m more of a listener than a speaker.
But some people who have a negative mind to their life or just want to get something for free without effort. 
>> But  if there are people who have negative point of view and just want to get something for free,
Then I scold them to get a positive mind, if they should live. 
>> Correct
Endless complaining is never helpful our life. 
>> Endless complaining is never helpful in our life
So when I communicate with others, I want to be a good listener and good adviser at the same time.
>> Correct

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