ESSAY

Hi [이름]! ^.^

Happy Thursday! ^^

Very good! ^^

Well said! ^^

I am glad that you expressed your opinion about the given statement very honestly and directly.

You know that living in your city is not really a good idea, so you want other people to change their minds if they want to move to your city.

I admire you for being so caring.

By the way, you did a good composition.

There are just few things you need to consider to make your composition better.

First, you need to make proper spacing.

Be sure that all words are separated by spaces.

Then, be careful with the capitalization of the words that you will use.

Lastly, take note the usage of conjunctions and proper separation of sentences.

Anyway, as a whole you did great in doing your composition! ^^

See you! ^^

... Teacher Paula ... ^.~

*ESSAY: A person you know is planning to move to your town or city. What do you think this person would like and dislike about living in your town or city? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.

I am living in Seoul and i moved into this cith 12years ago.
>> I am living in Seoul, and I moved into this city 12 years ago.

>> OR: I am living in Seoul, Korea, and I moved into this city 12 years ago.

As far as i\'m concerned, i don\'t want to recommend living in Seoul.
>> As far as I\'m concerned, I don\'t to recommend living here.

As you know, Seoul is the capital city of Korea, there are so many people everywhere.
>> As you know, Seoul is the capital city of Korea. There are so many people everywhere.

I am really sick and tired of a busy strees , subway, bus and traffic.
>> I am really sick and tired of the busy streets, subway, bus and traffic here.

So if someone has a plan to move to Seoul, i will try to stop the plan. ^^;
>> Therefore, if someone has a plan to move to Seoul, I will try to stop him or her.

I guess, because of the above reasons, they might dislike about living in this city.

>> I guess, because of the above reasons, they might dislike living in this city.

>> OR: I guess, because of the reasons above, they might dislike living in this city.