Essay

2017-06-27 · 첨삭 강사 Charlie

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Question : Universities should give the same amount of money to their students' sports activities as they give to their university libraries. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. Answer : I think that university should give the same amount of money to their student’s sports activities compared with libraries. because sports activities is as important as learning. students usually make a relationship with each others by sports activities. It could be more important than learning to them in social life. So I believe that university should be interested in student’s sports activities and invest money to them.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]gi! ^^


Thank you for answer last Friday\'s composition topic. You did a good job.


All good things,

==Teacher Charlie==


I think that university should give the same amount of money to their student’s sports activities compared with libraries. because sports activities is as important as learning. students usually make a relationship with each others by sports activities. It could be more important than learning to them in social life. So I believe that university should be interested in student’s sports activities and invest money to them.

>> I think that universities should give the same amount of money to their student’s sports activities as they do with university libraries because sports are as important as learning. Students usually learn how to socialize and make friends through playing team sports. Learning how to socialize is more important than just learning in my opinion so that is why I believe that universities should support athletics as much as they do academics.

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