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2017-07-19 · 첨삭 강사 Travis

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Both of them are very important to career, and they are not separated each other. In university you can make a friend whom will be working in a same industry with you, which is helping you get a more experience and improving soft skills. However, your knowledge is useless without experience and lack of soft skills will disturb your career oftenly. To get a good job and reputation in work, both of it is equally critical things. So my opinion is two of them are necessary to achieving a goal

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]!

I\'m glad that you made you homework. I like your point in this topic and it is true. Actually, there are a lot of things to consider whenever we are going to a professional word.

Teacher Travis.

Both of them are very important to career, and they are not separated each other.

>>Both career are very important, and they can\'t be separated.

In university you can make a friend whom will be working in a same industry with you, which is helping you get a more experience and improving soft skills.

>>In university, you can make a friend whom you will working with in the same industry, which will help you to get more experience and improving technical skills.

However, your knowledge is useless without experience and lack of soft skills will disturb your career oftenly.

>>However, your knowledge is useless without experience and lack will often disturb your career.

To get a good job and reputation in work, both of it is equally critical things.

>>Correct.

So my opinion is two of them are necessary to achieving a goal

>>So my opinion that two of them are necessary to achieve a goal.

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