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Can music influence your behavior?
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Absolutely, music always influences my behavior.
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I don\'t know why, but maybe because I am a vocalist and I have much of experiences about most of song\'s lyrics.
>>I don\'t know why but maybe because I am a vocalist and I read most the song\'s lyrics.
Music is just my life.
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I always learn something from music.
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It teaches me, makes me do something that I should do, and reminds the things that I has forgotten but important in my life.
>>It teaches me what to do and how to do things. It also reminds me of the important things I life.
Let me take an example.
>>Let me give an example.
Do you know the song \'Drown\'by amazing band, \'Bring me the Horizon\'?
>>Do you know the song, \'Drown\' by an amazing band, \'Bring me the Horizon\'?
When I listen to that music, whenever and whenever I am, I always cry.

>>When I listen to that music, I cry.
 Especially the part often song, \'cause you know that I can\'t do this on my own\' it made me that to accept that I couldn\'t do it myself, and I had to embrace people\'s help.

>>Especially the part of the song, \"Cause you to know that I can\'t do this on my own,\" I make me accept that I couldn\'t do it on my own thus I had to embrace other\'s help.
 Maybe, it is because I\'m suffering from depression right now, but is doesn\'t change that fact that music influences me.

>>Maybe, it is because I\'m suffering from depression right now, but it doesn\'t change the fact that music influences me.