Essay
학생이 쓴 원문
Hello Irene!
Were you disappointed with me because I am not the [이름] who you are expected? hahaha
I haven't studied English almost for 2 years. but you made me comrtable today. In addition you encourage me to study harder with your hard grade. I got 22 grade from you .T'T Just kidding ^^ hahaha
I was very pleased with your class today.I hope we have good time in our class all the time. See you tomorrow!
Essay : World history suggests that violence and conflict were more evident under male leadership than under female leadership. So, for peace to prevail, female leadership can be considered as a better option than male leadership. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
I am disagree with that male leader is more violent. I think, violence and conflict do not depend on what gender the leader is but depend on what personality the leader is. In my exprience, gender is just prejudice. It is circumstance to make human violent. because we are all human being.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]! It\'s nice to hear from you. Thank you for sending your composition today. No, I was not disappointed that you were not the [이름] I was expecting. ^_^ I was actually surprised and I made up my mind that all women with the name \'[이름]\' are good people. I really had fun in the class. Thank you for your kind words. I\'m looking forward to our next classes. ^_^
~T. Irene~
Hello Irene!
Were you disappointed with me because I am not the [이름] who you are expected? hahaha
>>> Were you disappointed with me because I was not the [이름] you were expecting? hahaha
I haven\'t studied English almost for 2 years. but you made me comrtable today.
>>> I haven\'t studied English for almost 2 years but you made me feel comfortable today.
In addition you encourage me to study harder with your hard grade.
>>> In addition, you encouraged me to study harder because of the grade you gave me.
I got 22 grade from you .T\'T Just kidding ^^ hahaha
>>> Correct.
I was very pleased with your class today.
>>> Correct.
I hope we have good time in our class all the time. See you tomorrow!
>>> I hope we will have a good time in all our classes. See you tomorrow!
Essay : World history suggests that violence and conflict were more evident under male leadership than under female leadership. So, for peace to prevail, female leadership can be considered as a better option than male leadership. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
I am disagree with that male leader is more violent.
>>> I disagree that male leaders are more violent than female ones.
I think, violence and conflict do not depend on what gender the leader is but depend on what personality the leader is.
>>> I think, violence and conflict do not depend on the gender of the leader but on the personality of the leader.
In my exprience, gender is just prejudice.
>>> In my experience, gender is just an issue of prejudice.
It is circumstance to make human violent. because we are all human being.
>>> It is the circumstance that make humans violent and we are all human beings.
~T. Irene~
Hello Irene!
Were you disappointed with me because I am not the [이름] who you are expected? hahaha
>>> Were you disappointed with me because I was not the [이름] you were expecting? hahaha
I haven\'t studied English almost for 2 years. but you made me comrtable today.
>>> I haven\'t studied English for almost 2 years but you made me feel comfortable today.
In addition you encourage me to study harder with your hard grade.
>>> In addition, you encouraged me to study harder because of the grade you gave me.
I got 22 grade from you .T\'T Just kidding ^^ hahaha
>>> Correct.
I was very pleased with your class today.
>>> Correct.
I hope we have good time in our class all the time. See you tomorrow!
>>> I hope we will have a good time in all our classes. See you tomorrow!
Essay : World history suggests that violence and conflict were more evident under male leadership than under female leadership. So, for peace to prevail, female leadership can be considered as a better option than male leadership. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
I am disagree with that male leader is more violent.
>>> I disagree that male leaders are more violent than female ones.
I think, violence and conflict do not depend on what gender the leader is but depend on what personality the leader is.
>>> I think, violence and conflict do not depend on the gender of the leader but on the personality of the leader.
In my exprience, gender is just prejudice.
>>> In my experience, gender is just an issue of prejudice.
It is circumstance to make human violent. because we are all human being.
>>> It is the circumstance that make humans violent and we are all human beings.
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