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Hi Irene?
Did you have lunch? Do not skip your lunch!
ESSAY: Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
There should be positive sides and negative sides in the effet of technolongy on the relationships and interations between people.
If I have to choose,I will choose that techonology has become a positive development.
I can meet and talk with friends wherever and whenever I am.
I don't need to dress up for meeting someone.
I can make new friends anytime through SNS.
I don't neede to spend money to meet freinds at the Coffee shop.
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.
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But I miss the time when I waitted for my friend for hours sitting at a Cafe with a big anger.
And I miss the time when I sent love letters at the post office.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]! Thanks for your answer. It nice to reminisce the past, right? There\'s been a lot of changes these days indeed. Keep writing! ^_^
~T.Irene~
Hi Irene?
Did you have lunch? Do not skip your lunch!
>>> Correct.
ESSAY: Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
There should be positive sides and negative sides in the effet of technolongy on the relationships and interations between people.
>>> There are positive sides and negative sides on the effect of technology to relationships and interactions between people.
If I have to choose,I will choose that technology has become a positive development.
>>> If I have to choose, I will choose that technology become a positive development.
I can meet and talk with friends wherever and whenever I am.
>>> Correct.
I don\'t need to dress up for meeting someone.
>>> Correct.
I can make new friends anytime through SNS.
>>> Correct.
I don\'t need to spend money to meet freinds at the coffee shop.
>>> Correct.
But I miss the times when I waited for my friend for hours sitting at a cafe with big anger.
>>> But I miss those times when I had to wait for my friend for hours sitting at a cafe getting angry by the minute.
And I miss the times when I sent love letters at the post office.
>>> I also miss those times when I send love letters through the post office.
~T.Irene~
Hi Irene?
Did you have lunch? Do not skip your lunch!
>>> Correct.
ESSAY: Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
There should be positive sides and negative sides in the effet of technolongy on the relationships and interations between people.
>>> There are positive sides and negative sides on the effect of technology to relationships and interactions between people.
If I have to choose,I will choose that technology has become a positive development.
>>> If I have to choose, I will choose that technology become a positive development.
I can meet and talk with friends wherever and whenever I am.
>>> Correct.
I don\'t need to dress up for meeting someone.
>>> Correct.
I can make new friends anytime through SNS.
>>> Correct.
I don\'t need to spend money to meet freinds at the coffee shop.
>>> Correct.
But I miss the times when I waited for my friend for hours sitting at a cafe with big anger.
>>> But I miss those times when I had to wait for my friend for hours sitting at a cafe getting angry by the minute.
And I miss the times when I sent love letters at the post office.
>>> I also miss those times when I send love letters through the post office.
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